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Good sprite movie, but needs a few things

As far as the content, I liked it. But there were a few things that could have made this better:

-An ending: you covered this. But it's worth putting the effort into completing this again, so we can better appreciate your talent.
-Subtitles: The ability to choose between Spanish and English would be nice.
-An epilepsy warning: The white flashes could give some people seizures.

But overall, excellent work. This gets a 4 and an 8 from me.

*Achievement! Review*

As always, funny as hell, with a distinctive style and an important message for us viewers (*Achievement! Love It Or Hate It*). Foamy has a point: if anyone's gone back to "Newgrounds Pass 3" for medals yet, you will know 500 medal points on NG is no longer anything to gloat about (*Achievement! Self-Loathing Hypocrite*). It's a fun incentive to get people your play your game (*Achievement! Master Manipulator*), but really a game should be fun for the game itself. Thus why I still play Portal Defenders (*Achievement! Dedication*), but I stopped playing Alkie Kong 2 (*Achievement! Achievements Aren't Worth It*).

Why, oh why do we only realize the error of our ways when Foamy tell us it is so (*Achievement! Bow Before Foamy*)? A 5 and and 10 from me (*Achievement! Vote5plz*).

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Submit to Alphas next time...I think

Artwork: subpar, in my opinion. I think you could do better.
Animation: average, but good use of a zoom effect.
Style: nothing really new.
Storyline: okay. I did want to see the ending, and I wouldn't mind knowing why the mega-nuke was launched to begin with.
Sound: a tad quiet, but it didn't hog megs upon megs of file space, which i definitely appreciated.

I do think you should finish this. But next time you want to run an incomplete work by us, I'm pretty sure the place you want to go is NG Alphas (there's a link to it near the bottom of the Flash Portal page.) There's room for improvement, too, so keep working on it; you might check out the Learn Flash page for some tutorials on character building if you haven't done so already. (Again, link on the bottom of the FP page.)

Keep at it; you'll have something submission-worthy in time.

sjpicci responds:

alphas hasnt been working for a while, thus i will never put it there since you havent seen it for a couple of moths

I think someone has a career

Artwork: good quality.
Animation: minimal, but smooth and effective.
Style: solid cartoon goodness. Made me smile.
Storyline: for a twenty-second commercial, very well done. I've certainly seen worse.
Sound: Harry did well by you. Good use of AP music as well.

Overall: 5/5 and 10/10. Add this to your job portfolio.

Awesome

Artwork: good.
Animation: decent; bonus for lip-syncing. Could have been smoother, though.
Style: excellent. The choice of blues and grays gave a special ambience, and the ghosts added a lot to the overall feel of the song.
Story: well done. There was the impression of a rising champion throughout, and a feeling of harsh injustice at the end.
Song: good choice. I'll have to look up more by Heather Dale; I'm a sucker for Gaelic music. :)

Overall: 5/5 and 9/10, and a new addition to my favorites collection.

Enjoyed it

Ten for artwork and animation, but minus two for a rather cheesy storyline. I know, everyone else laughed their head off at the end, but it just didn't work for me. Still, good job. I give it a 4 and 8, and I wouldn't mind seeing more of this style in the future.

Not bad at all for a first submission. Keep 'em coming!

Funny, but...

As far as content, it wasn't half bad. I actually found myself smiling a little. But as is always the issue with movies on Newgrounds, it was horribly pixelated, and the audio was far too quiet. You might want to play around with that and see if you can fix any of the problems.

Fro responds:

Thanks for the review.

I played with the audio for months to be honest. This was the best that I could get it, but I totally understand what you mean.

Check the link in the author comments to see the high quality youtube version.

First try, okay

Perfectly understandable that you made it short. Try making storyboards for longer projects; plotlines are much more manageable that way. Even you don't make another animation for a year, get some practice drawing in Flash (and on paper) to improve your skills. Make sure you take advantage of the Lessons provided within the Flash program, if you haven't already; you can find it in the Help menu.

Not a bad start. Keep working on your skills, and don't join a crew.

coddude321 responds:

thanks. I'm definitely gonna write some storyboards in the future. I'll add scripts and dialogue. Like I said, this was just kind of a trial and error but it turned out better than I would have thought. Future flashes will totally be longer with plots and voices. Better stuff overall, but thanks for the review and I won't join a single crew.

It was okay for a start

Suggestion: come back in five years, with better drawing skills, some actual animation, and better audio recording equipment (and a deeper voice :P). Do the exact same thing you did here, but up the ante with your newfound Flash-making powers, and blow this one out of the water with its replacement. With enough practice, this just might make it to front page. (And then Tom will give you money!)

mcjammer666 responds:

yer but i dont really care

So...

You stuck a bunch of sound clips together, from music you did not make yourself, and attached them to play/stop movie clips, which you may or may not have created and programmed yourself, with barely visible animations in the background, which you may or may not have created, in a Flash that ends up being...seven megs large? And did you perchance happen to optimize the sound in this?

Next time you submit something, kindly demonstrate your own mastery of the tools available to you. If you like music, try making music and submitting it to the Audio Portal. But a simple playlist is something you can put on your MySpace. I'd like to see something a little more creative.

GMarixX responds:

sorry!! too bad for you!!

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