Dawnslayer's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[RHG - Skipper vs Tek]

Good, but the FILESIZE...

I enjoy RHG, and this was well done in terms of style and animation. But a fight this short should not be six megs large. Please optimize the sound or use a shorter music clip so we don't spend more time waiting than we do watching. Thank you.

liamdoode responds:

Yeah i was really trying to make it smaller, but i didnt see what was making it so big :/

[By The Moonlight]

Can't see

Gave you 3/5 for art and animation skill. But honestly, I couldn't see a thing that was going on with that color scheme. I understand it's dark, but everything blended in; I completely missed what happened at the end. (Being able to expand the movie might have helped a bit.) Also, the action cuts could have been a little more dynamic, getting in close rather than just watching from the sidelines.

Not bad at all, but it still needs work.

Marsume responds:

Hmm yeah. Sidelines arn't that exciting. Good point. :)

And I was afraid it was gunna be to dark :( Sorry.

[Fizz and Fazz:Hide & Seek]

Seeing improvement

The single storyline definitely helped. Random bomb gag was hilarious and well-placed; use it sparingly and it will always be funny. The "me first" argument was also entertaining. There could have a litle more of Fazz looking for Fizz, and the end of the game was a bit anti-climatic, but you ended it well with the TV bit and it was decently executed overall.

Technical criticism: the first few seconds were too small, and too close to the bottom of the screen. The action should be happening closer to the center. Voice acting still needs work, but part of that is practice, and expensive equipment is another part.

Still missing: background scenery, or even just a horizon line (remember - use layers); some color would be nice; and you might want to look around the Audio Portal for some fitting background music. (And aside from that giggle you used, you're doing great with the sound effects.).

It looks the next episode could be interesting. Remember what we've told you - learn from it. We're here to help you. In the meantime, this episode gets 3/5 and 5 starts from me. Keep working on it!

[Mastermind 4]

Thoroughly enjoyed this

I've watched this 4 or 5 times now, and it's still funny. The plot is an excellent offshoot from the game, loaded with classic Swain-style humor - best part was when Frenchy did himself in. And I appreciated the Star Trek reference as well.

Any plans to give Mastermind a rival? Could be an interesting storyline. (Or you can tell me to shut up; it's your character, after all.)

This is a series that deserves to rise above Newgrounds. 5 and 10 from me.

[Fizz and Fazz]

There's potential here

You went to the trouble of actually animating something, which is more than I can say for some people here. And I can definitely see some budding talent. What's needed here is more practice and foundation. Instead of doing short little bits, try making a storyboard for a full episode - a storyline that Fizz and Fazz can follow. (Example: Fizz and Fazz are hungry and go out to get a burger. It's supposed to be a one-minute drive. But throw some comedy in between, and you've got five minutes of hilarious hijinks.)

Be sure to take advantage of Flash's layering ability; backgrounds would help you a lot. Do some research on how to get better sound and recording.

Overall, not bad for your first submission. I give this a 2 and a 4. (And while we're on the subject, don't panhandle for fives; it makes you look bad.) Keep working on this; I see a lot of good things here, and with practice and effort you'll only get better.

[Yoyo vs FLLFFL]

Loved it

Never heard of RHG before today. Sounds like fun! Animation was good, the fight itself was awesome, and everything just clicked. Wouldn't mind doing this myself sometime...perhaps even against a rival such as yourself. Well done; a 5 and a 9 from me.

[my first flash..something]

Excellent first submission

Well-drawn, well-animated. Throw in some color, sound, and cleanup, and your skills can really go places. Also, see what kind of plotlines you can come up with; do a storyboard or something. This gets a 4 and 7 from me, and I look forward to seeing how you perform.