Dawnslayer's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Zero Gravity ep. 1]

Expand on the vocals

It was simple, it was funny. But all the characters kind of started to sound the same. I like Zero's mellow demeanor, but everyone else needed more feeling to their voice, particularly regarding the shouting moments. Fix that, and you'll have something great.

ThePatstar responds:

yeah, this is basically my first attempt at voice acting. I'll keep practicing, though. Thanks for the feedback

[PartyHard!!!]

Very /B/

I liked the Afro Lazor dude; he was pretty well done. That aside, the subject matter did get boring after a while; it's the sort of thing you'd put on your personal webpage but not in your personal showcase.

And good job not making it too epilepsy-incuding.

[Kirby Basics]

Very funny

I loved the "Burn the Rope" reference. The only recommendation I have is to work a little more on your English. Very nicely done.

Tecnologicomarplayer responds:

Over time I will improve my English. Thanks.

[Another Message From Me]

Two questions

One: What makes you think I'm scared to vote my mind?

Two: Did you just make this so you could flag "abusive" reviews that just happen to contain the B-word?

Three: Why DO you make crap Flash? (Feel free to answer this one directly; I'm trying to better understand the psychology of portal spammers.)

Grumio responds:

1: I was generalizing.

2: No, I'm trying to see how shitty of a flash NG will let pass, which happens to be very VERY shitty.

3: Alright, I'll be honest - just because I like your review. I make this crap for a few reasons. One of the main, and the original is for shitz and giggles. Whip up a terrible flash, and see if it passes - I don't know why it has any sort of entertainment value but it does. RAAAGE reviews are always funny too, and being an ass can induce a few laughs with my group of friends.

Another reason is that I wanted to get turd this week, so I figured that insulting some people would make them vote lower - but evidently I was wrong.

And part of it is that this is practice for me. Crap like The Face 1 and 2, a few of the randoms, are just my random shit that I draw to help improve myself. Sure, I'm too lazy to animate a full on movie (However one is in the works with Caecilius and I, full-length and ties all our spam flashes together, and I guess A Tragic Loss is kind of a movie), but a few people get kicks out of these loops. I know NG isn't a big truck for me to just dump my random doodles on, but that's where reason 1 comes in.

Plus a little trolling is entertaining, too. The amount of RAAAGE PM's I got for Durgz was hilarious.

[The First Day]

There is no optimism in this.

It was too short, the song was too long, the animation was practically nonexistent.

And anyone who's heard of Columbine ought to know this isn't funny.

Emby responds:

It's about destroying the building itself, so there's no school. Not so much the people...

[~Run~]

Pretty good

I liked it overall. Heck knows you did better with this song than Transformers. ( Not necessarily a difficult feat :P)

There was one little nitpick that I couldn't get past: whenever he was running through those mountains, it reminded me of the "Orange Runner" game...Other than that, I thought it was good.

FU5ION responds:

Thanks for your review!

I had a look at the Orange Runner game you mentioned and I can see what you mean in a different-dimension kind of way ^.^

I have witnessed their capacity for courage.
And though we are worlds apart, like us,
There is more to them than meets the eye.
I am Optimus Prime.
And I send this message to any surviving Autobots taking refuge upon the stars.
We are here.
We are waiting.

:P

[Erbal Jay Ep1]

And here's why:

-Visuals: The pixelation of just about everything you were looking at really ruined the experience. Either clean it up, or draw it yourself.

-Audio: Hard to understand with that whistling interference. You need some software to clean that up. And the voices were kind of quiet.

-Story: not bad. We'll wait and see where you take it.

It's a start, but it needs to shape up. Keep working on it.

FlashManJR14 responds:

THANKS...
STAYED TUNED, IT WILL GET BETTER...

[poptarts revenge (PTR)]

It was fine

Get NG preloaders here:

http://www.newgrounds.com/downloads/

Make that the first frame of the movie. Then on the last frame, open the Actions panel and type:

stop();

to end it. That is all you need to know.

Oh, and the Flash itself was okay. A good start.

FlashManJR14 responds:

thankz for the info

[owned by av]

Your first try, not too bad

I'm gong to tell you what other users told me when they said my first submission sucked: it needs SOUND. Whether it's music, bits off the Internet, whatever, sound adds a huge amount to any piece of work on NG.