Dawnslayer's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[hiphop sounds]

So...

You stuck a bunch of sound clips together, from music you did not make yourself, and attached them to play/stop movie clips, which you may or may not have created and programmed yourself, with barely visible animations in the background, which you may or may not have created, in a Flash that ends up being...seven megs large? And did you perchance happen to optimize the sound in this?

Next time you submit something, kindly demonstrate your own mastery of the tools available to you. If you like music, try making music and submitting it to the Audio Portal. But a simple playlist is something you can put on your MySpace. I'd like to see something a little more creative.

GMarixX responds:

sorry!! too bad for you!!

[Keep your City Clean]

Decent

Here's my unnecessarily tough review:

Art: beginner-level, but not bad.
Animation: minimal, but not to the point of boredom.
Sound: there was at least music.
Storyline: it was okay. For the future, storyboards make longer plots easier to manage.

Overall, okay for a beginner. I think you'll improve as you move forward and gain experience. Keep working on it!

manjunath responds:

Thank you so much for your valuable time to critic this movie and give me some useful pointers. God bless you kind sir :-)

[Mothers Day Gift]

Nice gesture

But...I have to be a jerk now and review it.

Art: not horrible, but could be improved quite a bit.
Animation: minimal. Again, work on it.
Sound: none. Believe me, this adds a lot to any movie.
Organization: it was okay.
The cursor: Kind of annoying, actually, even though it fit the theme.

Say hi to your mom for us, and keep working on your animation skills.

TheUndeadNinja responds:

I will work on my animation, i want to be really good one day.

[Star Trek TOS Intro]

Work on it

Your drawings of the Enterprise weren't bad, but they could use some work. As I-Rule said, work on tweening; it'll make life easier. Plus you may want to study the movements in the original version more closely; the days of motion control in the 1960's actually aren't too different from tweening now.

A decent likeness, but overall it leaves room for improvement.

Trekkie2063 responds:

True. I admit, this isn't great, but given I had a deadline of when the assignment was due, I don't think it's half bad. And like I say, I wanted to go back and improve stuff, but I forgot a great deal of flash lol

[Samir vs. Sticks]

What's missing

-Sound effects. Look around the Web for free sounds.
-Preloader, obtained here: http://www.newgrounds.com/downloads/p reloaders/
-A stop function. Just add "stop();" (without quotes) to Actions in the last frame, and be sure to put a "The End" in there.
-It's kind of small.

Not a bad start--in fact, it was entertaining--but it does need work.

TripleDK responds:

Haha, I kind of knew that, but thanks anyway :P
I also tried with a preloader and a stop thingy. But since it's really short, it felt weird with a preloader so... A new one is already in the making, which WILL include:
SFX, PRELOADERS!!!, REPLAY BUTTON!!!, and most important, it will be much longer :D

[Keanu Reeves Interview]

Not bad...

But just for the record, "The Day the Earth Stood Still" is not a new movie. It's a remake of a 1950's sci-fi classic. Watch that one; it's still good.

UberCream responds:

Yeah, but the remake is still a new movie, it's just not original.

[spongebob revenge]

Did you optimize this?

It seems odd that a slideshow Flash would occupy 7 megs of space...and as long as I'm here, I didn't like it. The plotline was botched, there was no animation, and the pictures that were there were in tatters. This needs major improvement.

beastwithin0 responds:

i dont really know how to make flashes im a bad drawer and im tryin my best ok?

[Jump? wht not...]

Boring

I understand it's your first try, but I measure everyone by the same yardstick. The storyline, or what there was of it, lacked even mild bemusement; storyboards can help you develop longer and deeper plots. The green buttons weren't necessary, and I think the replay needed a hit area. Animation can be much improved; look up some tutroials on character building and see what you can come up with. And as I have been told myself, it needs SOUND.

I give you credit for trying, but you leave a lot to be desired.

TechB responds:

this was an animation to get the feel for flash. I know it doesn't really have a storyline or any sound. That will come in time i guess. I've been spending ALLOT of time working with macromedia. And its really paying off. I'll be posting soem new stuff sometime idk when but it'll be up. Keep checking back and review some.

[FIFA09 Mini Commercial]

Epileptic overkill

Music and sound, and a lot less bright flashing (these cause seizures), as others have already said. Plus the text cuts were too lengthy and repetitive. You have much to learn; I'd suggest taking some real-world classes to improve your craft.

theterabyte responds:

Guess I should of place a warning... :)

[unfinished flash1]

Here's my take:

1. You need a preloaderhttp://www.newgrounds.com/do wnloads/preloaders/

2. KISS Principle: Keep Introductions Short and Sweet. Otherwise the viewer gets bored.

3. Frame rate. Up it to at least 24 per second.

4. Adding a simple stop function to the last frame keeps it from looping.

5. Don't just slap a song on and call it good. You need to constrain it to the video so it doesn't overlap itself.

Kudos for trying, but you have a long way to go.

darkenedmirror responds:

thanks for the review when my computers fixed im gonna improve it